"You have a great story and message; that should result in a greater measure of confidence than you are displaying! I am sure that as you practice more you will become a very effective speaker.
Specifics: -hands need to stay out of pockets (assuming…"
"A very compelling narrative, delivered with great poise.
Content: A very interesting story with a compelling lesson. A complementary, non-fictional story, especially a personal one, may have boosted the power of your message.
Organization: A brief…"
The video embedded above is viewable in the USA at http://www.hulu.com. This Episode IV is also available over YouTube if you click here. Sholom's speech on acts of loving kindness reminds us of the destruction of the temples depicted in the documentary above:…See More
""The Maghreb Orchestra is a unique project, bringing together prominent Israeli musicians, whose teacher, spiritual father and artistic director is Nino Bitton, the oud virtuoso from Jerusalem and one of the indisputable authorities in the…"
Thank you Professor for teaching me this unbelievable course. I became a much more polished speaker as the semester went on and the credit is yours. The flip classroom really does work!! What I learnt in this course will stay with me throughout my pursuit of a professional career and I am eternally grateful to you.Best Wishes,Yehoshua KrasnowSee More
The thesis statement didn't make a clear statement. You jump into the story without an attention device opening, thesis, or preview. Your thesis could of been more effective if you added an attention getting. You had one…"
"Your speech has a thesis statement and that is "be careful what you wish for". It expresses one main idea and it is very specific. You use the story of the man to support your thesis. This example shows what the thesis statement is all…"
"Your attention getting opening is spot on. I was drawn in from the start. The thesis sticks to your main point but I feel more examples would have further strengthened your speech. The content is interesting and fun. You have great organization in…"
a) The thesis statement did not quite make a statement. You jump right into the story without an attention getting opening, thesis, or preview.
b) There is not much evidence. Perhaps a personal touch or story would have been more effective.…"
"Your thesis statement was effective, it expressed one main idea and used specific language, you showed evidence to support your thesis statement. it could've been more effective if you could've had more examples to support your thesis…"