Storytelling and Song For English Language Learners

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October 2, 2011, Impromptu Speech Practice 1, Fall 2011

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Comment by Why Why. on October 10, 2011 at 5:41pm

Great attention getter, it links very well into the lessons he would like to share with us in the rest of the speech. The speech is well organized and has a nice flow.

The speaker shows much enthusiasm and attracted my attention from the beginning. Though, after a bit the enthusiasm felt like he was giving a holiday sermon in shull, as appose to a casual speech on reaching for the sky.

In all I was you kept my attention every moment to your next words and I feel it was a great speech, especially for an impromptu.

Comment by michael diamantstein on October 9, 2011 at 3:42pm
Great speech I think 2 much info that's mayb cuz it was 2 long good speech though
Comment by Dovid Rotblat on October 9, 2011 at 1:24pm
like i have said before, ill say it again, content and oraganization is superb. your speech is informative full of examples, follows a three topic evidence structure yet like before i have to criticize your delivery. Volume and pitch was good, but your posture needs improvement. you have a tendency to sway back and forth, back and forth, back and forth. I dont know about the aduience but your swaying took away concentration from your actual speech making you less interesting. Don't forget about your time limit. I have said it, the prof said it, random people in the comment section said it, you spoke for way too long. We live in a day and age where if we expect a 4 min speech and its longer than 1 min our minds already start to wander. keep it short (not that short) and keep your posture, then you'll be perfect.
Comment by z... on October 9, 2011 at 11:38am
I like the energy! Keep it up champ!
Comment by Moses Adler on October 5, 2011 at 7:23pm

I find it interesting that 90% of the criticism on here thus far is about the length of the speech. I should hope that there is more to talk about with these speeches than just how long they spoke. (Although I myself am guilty of criticizing someone about the length of their speech- I did at least give a reason as to what I felt made it too long).

At any rate- to get to this speech, I thought you did an excellent job. The one thing that struck me as unnecessary was the way you stretched out the start of your speech. I mean- I'm not sure what the first several sentences really added to your speech... You bumped you head, realized where you were, spoke to a stewardess??? I mean- you did have an interesting opening statement but I feel you probably should have jumped straight to the " Sky is the limit" motto

Comment by Smunch Kindelson on October 4, 2011 at 11:06pm

woah, no one commented yet.......where is everyone?! Dovid Rotblat you on vacation or something?! ok so i might as well get the ball rolling.....so Mark your speech was good but way toooo long. Its supposed to be a 4 to 5 minute speech, not 8 min. You were the last speech of the day, no one wants to sit through such a long speech, especially after a fast.

Alrighty guys the rest is up to you! I crave feedback!

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