Storytelling and Song For English Language Learners

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"Father and Son," A Narrative/Storytelling Warmup

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Comment by zinata zavalunova on April 8, 2014 at 10:21pm

Content

 The thesis statement didn't make a clear statement. You jump  into the story without an attention device opening, thesis, or preview. Your thesis could of been more effective if you added an attention getting. You had one main idea and used a specific language. You need to work on your variety of types of evidence (more examples) to support your thesis. The content  was interesting, vivid, and compelling, it taught a lesson.

Organization

You need to work on your attention device to grab the audience attention. The body  organization wasn't ordered it was more likely you retelling the folktale. There was a logical progression of ideas in time, topic and problem-solution. Your transitions are not clear, it could of been more effective if you used specific transitions.

Delivery

You had an eye contact, however, it could of been more effective if you looked at the audience most of the time. There was facial variety where you did make expressions. Your voice  was a bit shaking, it sounded like you were nervous and you rushed through it. Your body language was showing that you were nervous,you used  hand gestures. You didn’t use enthusiasm to develop your speech.

 

Timing

Your speech was about 3 minutes long. To make your speech more effective you should try working on making it longer , use dramatic pauses . Overall your speech topic was really interesting , I have never heard this folktale before . 

Comment by Shawn Thomas on April 1, 2014 at 5:02pm

Your thesis statement was effective, it expressed one main idea and used specific language, you showed evidence to support your thesis statement. it could've been more effective if you could've had more examples to support your thesis statement.

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